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BC Williams
Number of posts: 32
Points: 37
Registration date: 2012-01-07
 | | Subject: Irresolution Sat Jan 07, 2012 11:04 pm | |
|  ................Irresolution................................
In my soul, my thirst moves................................
like dreaming birds in the night watch.................................
I search for wisdom's perfect venture,................................
yet I know too that shades of grey................................
are as swans balancing on cool waters flux.................................
My prudent wings enfold you................................
determined to bosom your stirrings,................................
but I watch you weaken, pondering solemnly my words................................
and know this of you................................
druthering soft courses is only just a moments appeasement................................
Wisdom then is just wordless after thoughts, anxious one.................................
Your face, its paleness glistens rivulets of tears................................
and as I wait, my heart flutterings tighten with zeal.................................
But you know of my love,................................
you know I won't leave unless the birds too stop watching.................................
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bruce_hh
Number of posts: 4432
Age: 64
Location: Monterey, California, U.S.A.
Points: 4931
Registration date: 2008-10-22
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Sun Jan 08, 2012 3:02 am | |
| Dear **Ardent BC**: You appear enmeshed in becoming quite near. Your vision of loving is: pushing and shoving reduced into failing to veer.  |
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BC Williams
Number of posts: 32
Points: 37
Registration date: 2012-01-07
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Sun Jan 08, 2012 3:59 am | |
| Thank you for taking a look Bruce. You know, it's a pretty personal poem, and that you don't know the background I cannot fault your assessment. But thanks for your comment:-)
BC |
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bruce_hh
Number of posts: 4432
Age: 64
Location: Monterey, California, U.S.A.
Points: 4931
Registration date: 2008-10-22
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Sun Jan 08, 2012 5:21 am | |
| Dear **Darling BC**: I 'assess' with jingles that only may guess. You likely exist so completely I missed so completely I caused some distress.  |
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Gilly J
Number of posts: 1251
Points: 1178
Registration date: 2008-10-21
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Sun Jan 08, 2012 8:07 am | |
| Welcome to the poetic skies site BC
I loved your poem, which resounded with the movements and images of birds, and left the reader wondering...
Gilly |
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BC Williams
Number of posts: 32
Points: 37
Registration date: 2012-01-07
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Sun Jan 08, 2012 12:08 pm | |
| Thank you Gilly. I love writing dreamy, metaphoric writing that shares my passion.
Bruce - guess I'm so close to the subject matter I hadn't, at first, understood that others would find it coldhearted:-) But should we write, it is for the reader. And the reader is always welcomed to their thoughts. You've not caused distress, only introspection . . ..
BC |
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Carol Perroni
Number of posts: 682
Points: 761
Registration date: 2008-12-27
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Sun Jan 08, 2012 6:43 pm | |
| A very beautiful poem, BC  You're off to a great start! I love the way that you weave the bird imagery through your poem. You have a wonderful grasp on subtle emotions and thoughts. A dreamy, introspective poem with many layers of meanings. I enjoyed reading it a lot! Best, Carol |
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BC Williams
Number of posts: 32
Points: 37
Registration date: 2012-01-07
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Sun Jan 08, 2012 6:51 pm | |
| Well thank you Carol. Coming from you, this means a lot!
BC |
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Steve
Admin
Number of posts: 1255
Points: 1573
Registration date: 2009-03-23
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Sun Jan 08, 2012 10:37 pm | |
| A wonderful early posting BC, and welcome. Very poetic and as you say whimsically metephorical, I liked the intertwined birds. I am guessing "druthering" is a local dialect for I would rather... Steve all in a dither and keeping an eagle eye out Riggs 
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Steve
www.noaddress.co.uk
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davidf
Number of posts: 1799
Points: 1579
Registration date: 2008-10-22
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Mon Jan 09, 2012 12:34 am | |
| BC,
This is very intriguing. I was drawn into it. It is a little to deep for me I think, but such is the mark of a great poem!
Your new friend,
David Fox |
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jimmy1
Number of posts: 243
Age: 67
Location: blackpool
Points: 300
Registration date: 2008-10-23
| | Subject: welcome to group bc i like the line wisdom then is just wordless afterthoughts god bless jimmybxx Mon Jan 09, 2012 1:32 am | |
| | BC Williams wrote: | ................Irresolution................................
In my soul, my thirst moves................................
like dreaming birds in the night watch.................................
I search for wisdom's perfect venture,................................
yet I know too that shades of grey................................
are as swans balancing on cool waters flux.................................
My prudent wings enfold you................................
determined to bosom your stirrings,................................
but I watch you weaken, pondering solemnly my words................................
and know this of you................................
druthering soft courses is only just a moments appeasement................................
Wisdom then is just wordless after thoughts, anxious one.................................
Your face, its paleness glistens rivulets of tears................................
and as I wait, my heart flutterings tighten with zeal.................................
But you know of my love,................................
you know I won't leave unless the birds too stop watching.................................
© 12.5.10 by BC Williams
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Doreen Hampshire
Number of posts: 2569
Age: 71
Location: HULL England
Points: 2394
Registration date: 2008-10-22
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Mon Jan 09, 2012 5:50 am | |
| Like the others first welcome to Poetic Skies I loved this (yes magicial poem ) and of course the picture that goes with it. A lovely poem to greet us all with Thank you _________________   |
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BC Williams
Number of posts: 32
Points: 37
Registration date: 2012-01-07
| | Subject: Re: Irresolution Tue Jan 10, 2012 3:02 am | |
| Thank you all so much for the very kind words!
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