It was very enjoyable reading everyone's poems for crushed rose's October Challenge. Thanks for choosing my poem, crushed rose!

I'll try to make this an easy challenge for the month of November.

I was thinking that it would be fun to write about something that is secretive. It could be an actual secret or a mystery such as an unsolved crime. It could take place inside your mind like a fantasy or in a real place. Just let your imagination flow!

Please let me know if you've already done this one and I'll choose another topic!

I'll post a poem of my own to start things off!

Good luck to everyone!

Best,
Carol

that's a hard act to follow, Carol !!
it's a good picture, and I like the idea of a secret cabinet you can unlock when alone, and follow the dream it produces for a while

Rose x

Thanks crushed rose! I'm sure that everybody is going to have their own interpretation of the word 'secretive'! I'm looking forward to reading a poem by you!! xxoo

I'm sure all the poems will be interesting!!!

Best,
Carol

Two oldies for you, Carol ... to keep you busy

Secrets

When the wheat is quiet and still
No breeze flowing from the hill
It holds the secrets of badger cubs play
In flattened places hidden deep away
Of foxes and their cubs at night
Practising their ways for flight
Small mice hide amid the ears
As the owls circle, their biggest fear
Butterflies and insects flit in hidden bowers
Drawing nectar from poppy flowers
And it holds the secret of my love and I
As holding hands we wander by
Then when the wind is blowing
In myriad ears a rustle, growing
As secrets are passed around
The ears, to a whispering sound

Thanks for your two excellent poetry submissions, crushed rose!!

In the first one, 'Secrets,' I really like the way that you have described the secret world of the critters in the wheat field and how they might perceive the sounds of a couple passing by.

You have created the secret world of the critters within the secret world of whispers that are made by a human couple.

I really like the way that these two worlds intercept each other.

I also got an image of a cornfield with listening 'ears!'

Your second poem, 'Boxes,' implodes with emotion!

This is a really great poem!!

You have taken the contents from old boxes and conjured up the feelings and images of a past relationship.

I love the way that for a few moments you are caught up in the emotions and memories of this past relationship and it seems so real and vivid to you.

You are torn between knowing that the relationship has passed and wanting it to be revived in some way.

Well crafted and excellent word choices!!

Thanks for posting these two excellent poems!!

Best,
Carol

I haven't written poetry for ages, but I think this old one is appropriate, Carol.

A Secret Place


Under the trees along the track
(Fields and moorland back to back)
In the dappled shade and light
Myriad insects dance in flight
Walk the path to the centre place
And there be lost in time and space
An ancient quarry, wild, overgrown
Nature has claimed it for her own
Derelict buildings open to sky
While up above the Buzzards fly
Some strange creature in the stream
Weed covered ripples all that's seen
Wild deer warily slake their thirst
The rabbits probably came here first
Moorland ponies stay to crop
Grass that grows among the rock
Willows have colonized the quarry base
A wildlife haven, a Secret Place.

Thanks for posting your poem, Val

I love your images of a secret wildlife place!

Your images are very descriptive and it's easy to feel that you are right there in the wildlife
haven.

Your rhyming pattern flows smoothly and I love your keen observations of the activities that take place there.

Your words paint a wonderful picture of a secret place. I'd love to go there myself!

An excellent write!!

Best,
Carol

Sorry not to have been around for a while, just been rather busy.. but thanks for posting such an interesting challenge, Carol.
and here's my attempt...

Shadows in the Dark

As I lay awake,
It was the shadows
In the dark that
Told me you were there.
That play of dark
Within the darkness,
That feeling of
Your presence
Breathing there,
It was our secret time,
Then you were gone.
And in that empty space,
All that was left
Was your memory.

Gilly J

A very interesting poem, Gilly

It has a haunting, secretive quality to it that I like a lot.

I can't quite tell what is real and what might be memory which makes it intriguing.

Certainly there is or was a living, breathing presence in the poem that lingers on.

An excellent poem!!

Thanks for posting it!

Best,
Carol

antropolis

Subject: Re: Your diary Sun Nov 20, 2011 2:49 pm

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that was good Berry! ~Scott



Gilly J

Subject: Re: Your diary Sun Nov 20, 2011 11:30 pm

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It's said that writing a diary can be good therapy... and it will keep your secrets for you.
Liked the poem.



bruce_hh

Subject: Re: Your diary Yesterday at 1:27 am

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Dear **Berry**: Sir Pepys (*Old Sam*)
has given your verses a slam.
My daily persuasions
pursue many legions
as those might illumine some stem.



Carol Perroni

Subject: Re: Your diary Yesterday at 3:40 pm

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This brings back memories of my childhood when I used to have one of those diaries that locks with a key.

I used to write in it a lot and hide it in different places.

I do remember that it poses certain privacy compromises when the key is lost and you have to find someone to help you open it...

I enjoyed reading your poem a lot, Berry

Your poem could have been posted in the November Challenge section because this month's subject is 'secrets' and your poem fits in perfectly with this theme.

Best,
Carol


With Berry's permission, I'm just reposting his poem and comments into the November Challenge.

Hi everyone!

Thanks for submitting your poems to the November Challenge!

I enjoyed reading all of them.

Since there were so many poems submitted this month, it was a very tough decision for me to choose one!

.......Whoops!......I mean that even though there were so very few entries, they were of such a high quality that you made my job very difficult!

I've read every poem over a few times and really I just couldn't decide which one I liked better than another one, because they are all so unique and they all had such a different approach!

But alas!.... Choose I must!...So I think that I'll pass December's baton over to Val for her wonderful poem titled, 'A Secret Place!' I really enjoyed the way that Val described the secret habitat for animals and other critters! Well done, Val!

Congratulations!

Best,
Carol

Thanks Carol... and thanks to all who entered... all brilliant entires I think too.

Well done Val!!!

I will set the thread for December.. and over to you Val.....

Gilly x