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crushed rose
Number of posts: 1282
Points: 1506
Registration date: 2009-08-29
 | | Subject: Carry with you Sun Aug 22, 2010 11:10 pm | |
| Carry with you all my dreams
Fill empty skies with beating wings
Yield not to buffeting storms
Soar with me from mortal things
Sweep us up through soft moonbeams
Touch the stars, disperse their light,
Scatter it where darkness lies
Pattern me your arc of light
Take me with you, let me fly
Show me all the sea and sky
Fly me high, fly me low
Teach to me all which you know
Swoop me to the furthest star
Keep me close, take me far
Let me feel what freedom brings
Feather light within your wings
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davidf
Number of posts: 1796
Points: 1576
Registration date: 2008-10-22
| | Subject: Re: Carry with you Mon Aug 23, 2010 12:08 am | |
| Rose,
I like this, but I am a bit confused. Is this a love poem or a poem to God? (which would be surprising, since you don't normally write those.) Nice job, either way.
Your friend,
David Fox |
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Eunice Perkins
Number of posts: 2664
Location: New Zealand
Points: 2325
Registration date: 2008-11-06
| | Subject: Re: Carry with you Mon Aug 23, 2010 10:09 am | |
| I love the whole feel of this poem, Rose. |
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antropolis
Number of posts: 876
Age: 37
Location: Garland, Tx
Points: 1582
Registration date: 2009-11-27
| | Subject: Re: Carry with you Mon Aug 23, 2010 6:51 pm | |
| That was good Rose! ~Scott |
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Jo Cursley
Number of posts: 2343
Age: 62
Location: East Devon, UK
Points: 2027
Registration date: 2008-10-22
| | Subject: Re: Carry with you Fri Aug 27, 2010 3:57 pm | |
| It seems like a love poem - a desire to be with the person who most gives you a feeling of freedom and aspiration perhaps? It was very beautiful.
Jo x |
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crushed rose
Number of posts: 1282
Points: 1506
Registration date: 2009-08-29
| | Subject: Re: Carry with you Mon Aug 30, 2010 9:47 pm | |
| Most definitely a love poem! to the one who has let me fly free as myself, and makes me feel safe while I do ...
thank you for your comments
Rose x |
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Steve
Admin
Number of posts: 1254
Points: 1572
Registration date: 2009-03-23
| | Subject: Re: Carry with you Mon Aug 30, 2010 10:08 pm | |
| A lovely poem of trust and dreams Rose. Steve butter fingers Riggs 
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Steve
www.noaddress.co.uk
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karen
Admin
Number of posts: 909
Age: 51
Location: Poetic Skies
Points: 658
Registration date: 2008-10-17
| | Subject: reply Thu Sep 09, 2010 7:37 am | |
| this one is truly beautiful rose and filled with love
the whole poem sings from the sheet called amore
huggs
karenxx
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Gilly J
Number of posts: 1251
Points: 1178
Registration date: 2008-10-21
| | Subject: Re: Carry with you Sat Sep 11, 2010 7:12 am | |
| A lovely poem, full of love and contentment. |
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