backstreetdreamer

Number of posts: 245 Points: 477 Registration date: 2008-11-19
 | Subject: Moontangled rain. Thu Aug 05, 2010 11:10 am | |
| Moon tangled rain danced around in the night With the evening laced silence pulsatingly bright As long silver lined fingers threw diamonds around To each shimmering puddle world set in the ground, Eyes shine forth from doorways, caught fast in the rain And those jewels in ebony seek to explain Why time can be holy when dipped in the shade And be unaware of night psalms as they fade.
He stood on the cliff and looked down at himself Looking up at a bookend alone on the shelf, For her words had all flown in an evening of sighs Like the dreams in her heart, and the love in her eyes, Even loneliness felt steeped in comfort to him More so than the sea where his promises swim, For his handkerchief held the dried pearls from her eyes Intermingled together , two lost lover’s cries.
As gulls carved a moon painted lattice work lace The breeze carried yesterday off from his face, And the stars spelled her name out with silver soft flair While he stood and went over his memories there, Until time tangled tensions cast off from his heart As he vowed to his penitence for a new start, The moon shaped her tears on a manuscript cloud And wrapped up his mistakes in a yesterday shroud…
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karen Admin

Number of posts: 909 Age: 51 Location: Poetic Skies Points: 658 Registration date: 2008-10-17
 | Subject: reply Thu Aug 05, 2010 8:27 pm | |
| sounds like you have been sat looking out to sea again and dreaming, some excellent lines throughout, love the words moon tangled rain
huggs karenxx |
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Steve Admin

Number of posts: 1196 Points: 1498 Registration date: 2009-03-23
 | Subject: Re: Moontangled rain. Thu Aug 05, 2010 8:30 pm | |
| I can think of no better setting to recall fond memories, and all the freshness of such an evening to clear ones thoughts.
I could picture the swirling waves far below Keith. _________________ Steve www.noaddress.co.uk
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Jo Cursley
Number of posts: 2343 Age: 62 Location: East Devon, UK Points: 2027 Registration date: 2008-10-22
 | Subject: Re: Moontangled rain. Thu Aug 05, 2010 9:48 pm | |
| Ah! You show so well the yearning for times past when a relationship was alive and warming in comparison with present desolation. Magically but sadly penned.
Take care, Keith. Jo x |
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Doreen Hampshire

Number of posts: 2529 Age: 71 Location: HULL England Points: 2342 Registration date: 2008-10-22
 | Subject: Re: Moontangled rain. Fri Aug 06, 2010 7:10 am | |
| a lovely poem filled with sad memories _________________   |
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antropolis

Number of posts: 817 Age: 37 Location: Garland, Tx Points: 1495 Registration date: 2009-11-27
 | Subject: Re: Moontangled rain. Fri Aug 06, 2010 5:18 pm | |
| That was good Backstreetdreamer! ~Scott |
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crushed rose

Number of posts: 1250 Points: 1468 Registration date: 2009-08-29
 | Subject: Re: Moontangled rain. Sun Aug 08, 2010 5:19 pm | |
| An excellent poetic walk through the rainy streets to the lonely clifftop, Keith. I particularly like the first verse
Rose x |
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