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crushed rose
Number of posts: 1282
Points: 1506
Registration date: 2009-08-29
 | | Subject: Love Mon Aug 02, 2010 5:36 pm | |
| Love can be soft and pliable
Moulding around another’s need
Instinctively reliable
Seeking to please with every deed
Love can be hard and selfish
Taking but not giving from the heart
Controlling another with relish
Whilst tearing tranquility apart
True love is when both partners care
And create together a heaven to share
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antropolis
Number of posts: 876
Age: 37
Location: Garland, Tx
Points: 1582
Registration date: 2009-11-27
| | Subject: Re: Love Mon Aug 02, 2010 5:47 pm | |
| That was good Rose! ~Scott |
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Doreen Hampshire
Number of posts: 2569
Age: 71
Location: HULL England
Points: 2394
Registration date: 2008-10-22
| | Subject: Re: Love Mon Aug 02, 2010 7:21 pm | |
| A good one Rose _________________   |
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Jo Cursley
Number of posts: 2343
Age: 62
Location: East Devon, UK
Points: 2027
Registration date: 2008-10-22
| | Subject: Re: Love Mon Aug 02, 2010 9:15 pm | |
| Mmm I'm not sure that the second stanza is about love - more like control. Like the first and third stanzas though.
Jo x |
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Eunice Perkins
Number of posts: 2664
Location: New Zealand
Points: 2325
Registration date: 2008-11-06
| | Subject: Re: Love Wed Aug 04, 2010 10:06 am | |
| A poem of contrasts. So many relationships do follow thepattern in the second verse sadly. |
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crushed rose
Number of posts: 1282
Points: 1506
Registration date: 2009-08-29
| | Subject: Re: Love Wed Aug 04, 2010 10:08 pm | |
| thank you for commenting, it was done as a rewrite of William Blake's The Clod and the Pebble ...two different types of love, neither of which to me seemed right, hence the last couplet
Rose x |
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Steve
Admin
Number of posts: 1254
Points: 1572
Registration date: 2009-03-23
| | Subject: Re: Love Wed Aug 04, 2010 11:55 pm | |
| Nice one Rose  Steve clod in love, but feel free to skim me as a pebble Riggs
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Steve
www.noaddress.co.uk
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backstreetdreamer
Number of posts: 283
Points: 549
Registration date: 2008-11-19
| | Subject: Love. Thu Aug 05, 2010 11:05 am | |
| Hello again Rose, a really nicely written poem on the different lines of love, I enjoyed the read...Keith. |
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crushed rose
Number of posts: 1282
Points: 1506
Registration date: 2009-08-29
| | Subject: Re: Love Sun Aug 08, 2010 5:11 pm | |
| Keith, thank you kindly, sir Steve ...when we are by the river, you may regret those words ....  |
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