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Carol Perroni

Number of posts: 165 Points: 192 Registration date: 2008-12-27
 | Subject: Winter Sunlight Tue Jan 26, 2010 12:14 am | |
| She disappeared out of the diamond winter sunlight into the shadow world, where a tree stood shivering at its edge She wanted to calm the tree, but it only cast its book of words down on the pages of snow at her feet for her to read A language written in a code of shadows like the crosshatchings from a quill pen, dipped in the branches' dark red ink The story told the life of the tree in its chapters, weaving through the wind like the concertos of Vivaldi's Four Seasons- winter, summer, fall and spring... A history stretching out in all directions- up the jagged mountainsides and down the slopes to hidden streams... while the black crow shakes the boughs of the tree with his shadowy inky scratchings... connecting the dots in his dark dreams... carol  |
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Eunice Perkins

Number of posts: 1680 Location: New Zealand Points: 1337 Registration date: 2008-11-06
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Tue Jan 26, 2010 9:28 am | |
| A really excellently written poem, Carol. I enjoyed it so much. There are many wonderful lines.  |
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Gilly J

Number of posts: 750 Points: 565 Registration date: 2008-10-21
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Tue Jan 26, 2010 9:47 am | |
| I liked this, the images created from your words. |
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Doreen Hampshire

Number of posts: 1397 Age: 69 Location: HULL England Points: 1075 Registration date: 2008-10-22
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crushed rose

Number of posts: 480 Points: 535 Registration date: 2009-08-29
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Tue Jan 26, 2010 9:01 pm | |
| Great imagery in this, Carol, and a stark contrast between the snow and the shadows, it ended on a dark note, I felt Rose x |
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Jo Cursley

Number of posts: 1328 Age: 60 Location: East Devon, UK Points: 1033 Registration date: 2008-10-22
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Tue Jan 26, 2010 9:59 pm | |
| Very dark - srting in sunshine and ending with dark dreams... Extremely atmospheric, Carol. Jo x |
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Steve

Number of posts: 426 Points: 546 Registration date: 2009-03-23
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Wed Jan 27, 2010 12:26 am | |
| Class-ical poem Jan van damme, Sylvester Stallone, and Arnold Schwarzenegger are invited to make a film about classical composers. Van Damme says... "I shall be Beethoven" Stallone says... "I shall be Vivaldi" Arnold says.... "I'll be bach"  |
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Carol Perroni

Number of posts: 165 Points: 192 Registration date: 2008-12-27
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Wed Jan 27, 2010 12:57 am | |
| Thanks for all of your kind and insightful comments. I'm glad that some of you enjoyed reading my poem. rose and Jo, I think that the bird was having some really bad dreams... Very funny, Steve! Thanks!...Hasta la vista, baby!.... (maybe I'll use that in my next poem! You've got to look for inspiration everywhere!) xxoo carol  |
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davidf
Number of posts: 1125 Points: 784 Registration date: 2008-10-22
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Wed Jan 27, 2010 1:48 am | |
| Carol, Though dark in parts, this poem was very beautiful. I enjoyed it a lot. Your friend, David Fox |
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antropolis

Number of posts: 203 Age: 35 Location: Garland, Tx Points: 409 Registration date: 2009-11-27
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Thu Jan 28, 2010 5:08 am | |
| That was good Carol! ~Scott |
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Doreen Hampshire

Number of posts: 1397 Age: 69 Location: HULL England Points: 1075 Registration date: 2008-10-22
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Carol Perroni

Number of posts: 165 Points: 192 Registration date: 2008-12-27
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Fri Jan 29, 2010 9:43 pm | |
| Thank you very much for choosing my poem to be the Poem of the Week! It's always great to feel that your work is being read and appreciated!! Thanks again to everyone!! xxooxx Best wishes, carol  |
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Steve

Number of posts: 426 Points: 546 Registration date: 2009-03-23
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Fri Jan 29, 2010 10:41 pm | |
| Well done Carol, well deserved. |
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Carol Perroni

Number of posts: 165 Points: 192 Registration date: 2008-12-27
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Sat Jan 30, 2010 5:27 am | |
| I sincerely appreciate it. xxoo carol  |
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backstreetdreamer

Number of posts: 154 Points: 280 Registration date: 2008-11-19
 | Subject: Winter Sunlight. Sat Jan 30, 2010 12:22 pm | |
| Many congrats on your poem being poem of the week Carol, I agree with the concensus of opinion, a really lovely work. Sorry I havn't written, been a bit poorly, but o.k. now. My best to you, Keith. |
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Steve

Number of posts: 426 Points: 546 Registration date: 2009-03-23
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Sun Feb 07, 2010 1:47 am | |
| Hey like the hat ... and we are all getting brave again, neat picture. |
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Carol Perroni

Number of posts: 165 Points: 192 Registration date: 2008-12-27
 | Subject: Re: Winter Sunlight Sun Feb 07, 2010 5:48 am | |
| Thanks Steve..like your haircut! I'm having a little bit of trouble working your Schwarzenegger joke into my next poem, but I'm still working on it! xxoo carol |
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karen

Number of posts: 622 Age: 49 Location: Poetic Skies Points: 373 Registration date: 2008-10-17
 | Subject: reply Mon Feb 08, 2010 1:15 pm | |
| well written carol, 4 stars indeed for this piece excellent word use and description making the reader want more
huggs karenxx |
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