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Carol Perroni



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PostSubject: Winter Sunlight   Tue Jan 26, 2010 12:14 am


She disappeared out of the
diamond winter sunlight
into the shadow world,
where a tree stood shivering
at its edge

She wanted to calm the tree,
but it only cast its book of words
down on the pages of snow at her feet
for her to read

A language written in a code of shadows
like the crosshatchings from a quill pen,
dipped in the branches' dark red ink

The story told the life of the tree in its chapters,
weaving through the wind like the concertos
of Vivaldi's Four Seasons-
winter, summer, fall and spring...

A history stretching out in all directions-
up the jagged mountainsides and down
the slopes to hidden streams...
while the black crow
shakes the boughs of the tree
with his shadowy inky scratchings...
connecting the dots
in his dark dreams...



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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Tue Jan 26, 2010 9:28 am

A really excellently written poem, Carol. I enjoyed it so much. There are many wonderful lines.


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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Tue Jan 26, 2010 9:47 am

I liked this, the images created from your words.
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Tue Jan 26, 2010 4:38 pm

Very descriptive and a well worded poem Loved it Thank you

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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Tue Jan 26, 2010 9:01 pm

Great imagery in this, Carol, and a stark contrast between the snow and the shadows, it ended on a dark note, I felt

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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Tue Jan 26, 2010 9:59 pm

Very dark - srting in sunshine and ending with dark dreams...
Extremely atmospheric, Carol.
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Wed Jan 27, 2010 12:26 am

Class-ical poem Wink

Jan van damme, Sylvester Stallone, and Arnold Schwarzenegger are invited to make a film about classical composers.
Van Damme says... "I shall be Beethoven"
Stallone says... "I shall be Vivaldi"

Arnold says.... "I'll be bach"
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Wed Jan 27, 2010 12:57 am

Thanks for all of your kind and insightful comments. I'm glad that some of you enjoyed reading my poem.

rose and Jo, I think that the bird was having some really bad dreams...

Very funny, Steve! Thanks!...Hasta la vista, baby!....

(maybe I'll use that in my next poem! You've got to look for inspiration everywhere!)

xxoo carol
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Wed Jan 27, 2010 1:48 am

Carol,
Though dark in parts, this poem was very beautiful. I enjoyed it a lot.
Your friend,
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Thu Jan 28, 2010 5:08 am

That was good Carol! ~Scott
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Fri Jan 29, 2010 1:28 pm

Carol your wonderful poem has been chosen POEM OF THE WEEK An excellent poem Carol

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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Fri Jan 29, 2010 9:43 pm

Thank you very much for choosing my poem to be the Poem of the Week!

It's always great to feel that your work is being read and appreciated!!

Thanks again to everyone!! xxooxx

Best wishes, carol
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Fri Jan 29, 2010 10:41 pm

Well done Carol, well deserved.
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Sat Jan 30, 2010 5:27 am

I sincerely appreciate it.

xxoo carol
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PostSubject: Winter Sunlight.   Sat Jan 30, 2010 12:22 pm

Many congrats on your poem being poem of the week Carol, I agree with the concensus of opinion, a really lovely work. Sorry I havn't written, been a bit poorly, but o.k. now. My best to you, Keith.
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Sun Feb 07, 2010 1:47 am

Hey like the hat ... and we are all getting brave again, neat picture.
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PostSubject: Re: Winter Sunlight   Sun Feb 07, 2010 5:48 am

Thanks Steve..like your haircut!

I'm having a little bit of trouble working your Schwarzenegger joke into my next poem, but I'm still working on it! Very Happy

xxoo carol
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PostSubject: reply   Mon Feb 08, 2010 1:15 pm

well written carol, 4 stars indeed for this piece
excellent word use and description
making the reader want more

huggs
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